Monday, July 07, 2014

Rish Outcast 9: Mick Attends An Elementary School Carnival

So, this was the one that was supposed to drop last time.  Sorry, y'all.


Also, sorry about this story's title, though I am a little less sorry.

Right click HERE to download the episode, select Save Link As, and save the file to your hard drive.

Rish

1 comment:

Journey Into... said...

Tech stuff first. The embedded player worked fine, but the "Right-click to download" link doesn't.

I liked the story. I like the ending the way it was. I think there was enough there to understand what was going on. I think you handled it very deftly. You might have had the ex show up at the carnival in the beginning just to introduce her as a character rather than a reference. Some of the differences might have had more impact at the end. He could have been trying to avoid her etc.

I thought the "Sex with a Supermodel" booth was a bit implausible for a elementary school carnival, but it was funny.

As for a title, maybe "For A Good Cause"